All in all, a very nic efic. a few q's and comments.
1. the beggining paragraph was a bit vauge at first, and cosidering the 
exelent quality of the rest of the story, doesnt do it justice.
2.Whats the deal with the red tennis shoes? did I miss something here?
3.err.. what does pull brrraatatat mean? Some sports type thing?
4.Exelent writing syle, original if a bit strange ^_^
5. Blue thunder with a cold and Joe camel as a god... seek psychiactric 
help..hehe...

   Anyways, my input.
    -M Miner, (setting a minmei cd on fire as we speak)
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