On Wed, 27 Dec 1995, Caroline Ann Seawright wrote:

This is just the VERY rough fist draft, and I need some help in fixing
it up... My other editors seem to busy with Christmas type things to
help me. *pout* So, can some nice people out there help?  ^_^

Yup!

My comments will be surrounded by these things<<.

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Ranma nibun no ichi - Friends and Lovers            [WARNING : Lemon fanfic!]

Note : This side story fits in the Ranma nibun no ichi continuum between
University and Forget Me Not.

All characters portrayed in this fanfic are copyright of Rumiko Takahashi
and Shogakukan Inc, etc, etc, etc.
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Ukyou had learned of Ryouga's curse about a month before. It was strange, but
no more strange than Ranma's curse. <At least Ryouga stays male> she thought.

Now that's an interesting thing to say.  Most folks say "At least Ranma 

stays human..."<<

Ukyou stared, transfixed... <Ohhhhhh, Ryouga... I *can* excite you...> She

Oh, c'mon!!  Ukyou could excite anybody!<<

confused and upset Akari beside her. "So Ukyou-chan loves that Ryouga-yarou,

What does yarou mean?<<

kunoichi around... But I can't help loving Ukyou, however much I want to be a

Does kunoichi mean waitress?<<

tugged at his pants, "Mousse, you're drooling."

Heh heh<<

in between her legs. He was a little surprised to find her already wet...

What???  C'mon, even Mousse isn't that clueless.<<

Shampoo smiled a little, looking at her sleeping lover. "Mousse... Let's
just pretend that you have beated me..." She closed her eyes, and wriggled
her hands out of the silk ties. She slipped her arms around him, and she,
too, drifted off to sleep...

I dunno about that line.  I think, "Mousse, now you have beaten 

Shampoo..."  would be more ironic.<<

They both kissed, and held each other close, neither minding that they were
still both naked... When they drew apart, Ryouga placed the engagement ring
on Ukyou's finger...

The naked thing doesn't seem to fit...<<

And here's another fanfic (finally) written! You'll have to watch out for my
next one to see if anything happens between Konatsu and Akari. And the next
fanfic will star the Kunou siblings, Nabiki and Mikado, with Tofu-sensei and
Kasumi's first date.

Wow, neat stuff!  (Oh, and as for the finally thing, you should see how 

slow I write.)<<