At 10:25 AM 30/12/95 -0500, WW wrote:

If this looks good to you all, I'm sending it to r.a.a.s. today.  So 
please, could you take a close look at it?  I don't even want one 
spelling error in here.

			Moonlight & Cherry Pie

   Chapter Six -- You Want Pork For Dinner?!?

	Akane looked very uncomfortable, and carefully avoided looking at 
Ranma.  Of course, this meant she missed Ranma fidgeting and avoiding 
looking at her too.  "Well, now that we all know who Skuld is, could we 
please eat?  I don't want to be late to school."

[I don't want to be late for school.] might sound better.
                                         ^

 Chapter Seven -- Sisters Have To Stick Together

	Keiichi's door opened, and Belldandy poked her head around the
corner.  "Oh, Skuld!  I'll... be right out."  Skuld blinked a few time. 

[Skuld blinked a few times.]
                                    ^^^

	"Tendo, this is a great day."
	"Yes it is, Saotome.  Our children will be together soon."
	"And Akane will be able to cook for them."
	"Perhaps we should can call your wife now.  I'm sure if Ranma was

[Perhaps we should call your wife now.]
                       ^^^

Good story! I don't read much Ranma fic but it's growing on me :)
Now who was that talking to Ran-chan? Hmmmm. Didn't *sound*
like Shampoo ;)

Panda (Forever)

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