Jeanne,

     Your comments are welcomed. They have given me quite a few things to 
think about. Geez! Who would have thought that it could be this tough.

<general snippage follows>

Linna decides their first date (the second will be
explained later) will be at a surprise birthday party for Priss (more on
that later as well), which is where we first see him.

So Linna's going to admit to the world in general that she knows Priss well
enough to throw a birthday party for her?

     Point taken. The guest list has not been worked out yet. But didn't 
Priss, Nene and Linna play mini-golf together in BGC!2. I realize that a 
suprise party isn't the same, but.....

When the ADP guardian boomers went crazy in
BGC! ep 3 Meltdown, he was killed.

So this takes place after Crash?  If you are going to get Nene and Mackie
together, when did Mackie come back from Germany, and is Sylia still there?

     I get the feeling that if/when I get more than two lines on "paper" 
something will present itself.

    The college courses would prove useful, however. It seems that dad 

came

across a pair of 33-s boomers that were in need of repair. The boomers'
damage was not too extensive, but it was severe. One's AI seemed to have
been corrupted by what appeared to be a virus.

Must be Anri

     Actually, I had Sylvie in mind when I wrote that. The AI might have 
been warped somehow by the J1 combat control system in the DD Battlemover.

The other boomer also had major organ damage.
Again difficult to replace. At least boomer B's AI was mostly intact.

Must be Sylvie

     Nope. That would be Anri.


Suggestion: if you're going to do a series, try to make each story as
stand-alone as possible.  It is (IMO) good if they build on, and refer to,
things in the earlier stories.  But a common problem with series is that
many writers end each story with a "To Be Continued" cliffhanger. If, for
whatever reason, the author doesn't finish the series, it leaves the readers
hanging.

     True enough. All I can say to that is, I will try to have the entire 
'fic finished before any parts are released. Of course that might change.

Maybe Vision could show up for the party
with a little present, a recording contract.

George, I think you might be pushing things a little here.  Reika knows
Linna, but does she know the others?  Does *Vision* know any of them?


     Yeah, I kinda thought so. Oh well, I can dream can't I?

    In the second episode, we get some background on Linna's new 

boyfriend.

It is at this time that Kyle finally puzzles out how to restore boomer A's
AI without wiping its memory. To celebrate this occasion, he takes it to 

his

second date with Linna.

Second date with a girl and he brings another woman, a 33-S Boomer (AKA 'a
sex toy') along with him?

     Hmmmmm........  gonna have to rethink that scene.

Due to a strange quirk of fate, the date is at Hot
Legs. Linna is dumbfounded upon seeing boomer A. Priss is shocked
speechless.

Seeing that it's Sylvie, I'd say so.  Does she see her before, during, or
after her show?


     Methinks that she would show up just as Priss is finishing her last 
song of the evening. Yeah....... a fuzzy outline of the nights events is 
appearing....... Ummmmmm.......


Suggestion: I'd come with an antagonist soon, even if you're not going to
use him/her/it for a while.  It'll give you some direction to go for.  Maybe
some foreshadowing in stories before he/she/it first appears?

    Who or what the antagonist will be, I've no clue. At least I don't
think I do. In any event, a rough sketch of the first scene should be 

coming

soon.

     A few quarter-formed notions have popped up. Going to have to watch the 
series again to get a better idea.
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YO! Panda!  Go get the champaign and bamboo shoots!  (also, grab a sixpack
of soda for Isabell..er..Izzy!)

heheh

*POP*
Where's your glass Gopher?

Ferget th' bottle *HIC* jus' han' me 'nother bottle!   *HIC*
AlberCrombie

John Blackman is Fozzie

No, no, no! George Couture is Fozzie!

DETAILS!  DON'T BOTHER ME WITH THE DETAILS!

(sorry George, sorry John, don't know how I did that.)

     You must have had the caps lock button on. In any event, though the 
actual muppet name may be spelled f-o-z-z-i-e, I have been using f-o-z-z-y 
around the shop for the last two years. For some reason, I think it looks 
better.

     Cool nickname Izzy-chan. (Though 'Izzy' does remind me of an old 
battle-ax of a high school vice-principal)

<hcnum, hcnum, hcn... huh, wha?>
<I'm not as thunk as you drink I am, occifer.>


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