Ahh... That was great... but where's the rest of it [pitiful whining and
moaning sounds]  I need more...

I'm incredibly impressed, based on the release date of Shoryuden here in the
US, you must have cranked out 75+k of well polished text in under a month.  I
only noticed one error at all in all of it (an every towards the end that got
the e chopped and came out very).  The chracterizations were all well done,
although we didn't see a whole lot of Hajime or Amaru yet.  The only thing that
confused me at all (and it may just have been me missing something) was the
exact relationship between the Order, The Four Sisters, and the Ryudo brothers.
 All the pieces were there, but for some reason I just couldn't tie them
together easily.

So keep up the good work and hurry up and post the other three chapters that
you're hiding.   (please tell me you're hiding them and that they are done...
please  [moan whimper beg]) :)

	-DaR
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Dan Root - dar@andrew.cmu.edu