Greetings,

    (takes a large pair of pinkie shears and SNIP!)

    When writing firsthand, bad writing is an almost necessary form 

of characterization.  If Kunou were to think in slang and sentence  
fragments, and still speak in the King's English, that'd say something.

        >I've done that myself.  But that's no excuse for having "bad 
writing" in the rest of the story.  Example here:  Putting a quoted 
thought, followed by a sentence. [ "That's right," he turned around and 
put down the sword. ]  I've seen Bentley do that a lot in his stories.

    So....

    "That's right," he said. He turned around and put down the sword. 
or
    "That's right," he said then turned around and put down the sword.

    (hrmmms)

    IMHO it's a toss up between the first example Damon wrote and the 
second version I wrote. But that's just me.
    I haven't taken creative writing yet, I took writing 101 three 
years ago. I am no where near close to getting a writing style down, as 
for a quoted thought then followed by a sentence....personally it looks 
fine to me. I realize I forget to put said sometimes into a sentence, 
probably all the time. Dat's all for now, me hitting the sack. Cyas.
 

    Bentley "Because is one word right?" <- old joke. ;)
    bentley4@ix.netcom.com