On Thu, 2 May 1996 gaffney@iconn.net wrote:

Please help me make this better.  Grammar, character, non-
Japanese customs, plot, anything.  Don't spare my feelings.
Whip me, beat me, make me write bad checks.

The honour and customs outlined appear to be correct.  plot and style are 
good.  A change from the normal round of 'fics.  

I like it.

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                The Chaotic Trickster - kergma@sv.net.au