Hmm. Moderately well-written in terms of grammar and dialogue. My
biggest problem was the fact that you described things we really didn't
need to see. Unless the plane trip figures prominantly in the story, or is
used as the platform for a joke, it shouldn't be described. "The flight
was long, dull, and grueling" would have served your purpose equally well.
Take a razor to the length.
   So far you seemed to have resisted the temptation of "Ranma and Me"
stories - setting yourself up as all-powerful or all-knowing. Although,
since there hasn't been any real interaction it's kinda hard to say. The
marital arts info on you and the others is a bad sign...steer clear of the
"Perfect-Otaku" syndrome.

- Mike of No Particular Title or Handle
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