This seems very good but I think that you need to add just a little 
bit more at the end to solidify things, maby have akane walk away or 
something else along those lines but there is a good side to this.

Now Ranma is free to mary Ukyou :)
Kelly Conrad Davies Schultz
kellys1@randolph.spa.edu but only till june 10
Shade and sweet water.
Skywise

P.S. read Sailor Moon V    and the Circe Prodject
     and Bubblegum Zone    and Tokyo Babylon
     and Knights End       and Sailor Moon Refugees
     and Sailor Moon M     and The Wheel of Time
     and Honor Harrington  and Sour Times