A touching little story. I'm always happy to see fanfics break out of the
"Ukyo pines away for eternity" mold, and this one does a fairly god job of
it.
   I liked some of the asides (the unoticed messages on the Okonomiyaki,
etc.). The litle details are the hardest to do, and the most enjoyable.
   I'd write more, but, to my mind, the story needs very little C&C. It's
in a good final form.

- Mike of No Particular Title or Handle
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