Marisa Price wrote:

| Hmmm. Well, I am not really into the "Alien" type movies or stories,
| but this was interesting. Very well written, though you might want
| to break the paragraphs up a bit. Do some more work on it and let
| me read it again :).

If I write a full fic, it's not going to be like this.  This scene was more of
a practice session to see if I could write an OK action scene.  I realize the
scene was more sci-fi than anything... if I wrote the rest you'd see the story
isn't.  I'm not going to develop this any more... I think I'll start writing
the actual story now.

As for the paragraphs, I have only one excuse... too many essays!!

Thanks for reading it!
-- 
Neill
"Fighting for peace is like f@*#ing for virginity"
-John Lennon