On Fri, 5 Jul 1996, Entomorph wrote:

[...]

"Akane married Kunou!! And then the giant toe came to..." Ranma stops
as he notices he is awake, and that it was all a sick dream.
Genma scratches his head.
"Giant toe's?" Kain looks at Ranma dumbfounded.
"What? You never dream about giant man eating toe's?" Ranma asks Kain as he stands up.
Kain looks away.
"Well there was that dream about the naked fish headed turtle that lived in the toaster.."

[...]

I liked the toe and naked turtle sequence.  Then again, I'm a sucker for
the surreal.

[...]

Well I finally finished it. I just cant write in prose very well...
Tell me if I should stay writing this way or go back to script.
cya next time :)

This story had the feel of wanting to be a script, I think.  You may do
better by using script format, but if you want to develop your
prose-writing, then keep plugging along.  I'm no writing expert, but you
might want to take something you've already written as a script and work
on fleshing out the details in prose.

bryan

-Entomorph 


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