Overall I must admit I enjoyed this story. I especially thought the mountain
springs episode was great. However I do feel that the first half of their
realtionship feels rushed.  I also feel you overdid the ending a bit. Yes Jeff
would dispose of anything in his way, however I doubt he would be so crass as
to rampage though the classroom tossing desks this way and that to get to
Nabiki. His training would have installed much too much disipline in him for
that. I also have some problems with that fight episode woth Genma. Yes that
family does have an *amazing* attraction to water, but still.... At the least
you should ahve a rematch, I don't think Genma's pride would have allowed him
to accept such an ignoble defeat. ;)

When all is said and done however I am looking foward to part 2.


Penty