Ross,
Ross...
Ross Ross....
ROSS!!!!
Why do you do this to me!!!!!
You write a few paragraphs. A few, very well-written, wondefully
characterized, intricately plotted paragraphs. They suck me in. Then
they leave me hanging.
And then...just when I think I've put them out of my mind... you dribble
a few more paragraphs on the ML. And I get sucked in all over again.
:(
WRITE MORE! WRITE FASTER!!!!
Actually, I don't really want you to write faster if the quality of your
writing suffers. This is just to say that I really enjoy your story,
and I am quite impatient to find out what happens next.
The only criticism I have is on Joketsuzoku. Did you know that if you
write enough about the Amazons, you can spell Joketsuzoku with out
looking it up? :) I'm not sure that your characterization of the
village is accurate. Actually, it was how I was going to portray it in
my Amazon fanfic, until I read the manga summary that mentions a village
newspaper. It also makes a little more sense that the Amazons are a bit
more modern than we think - after all, Cologne and Shampoo had no
problem running a restaurant in Tokyo; surely that requires good
knowledge of the modern world.
I also tend to agree with what someone else wrote; surgery to correct
astigmatism and near-sightedness should be common and cheap by the time
your story takes place - we're already beginning to see a bit of that
now. I think Nabiki could still have a hold over Mousse, but in other
ways - maybe bionic enhancements that allow blades to shoot out of his
hands? Ugh, maybe not.
Anyway, I'm still breathless with anticipation over your next part to
this. Keep it up!
Writewritewritewritewriteuntilyourwristsacheuntilyourfingersarenumbuntilyourhandsfalloffwritewritewritewrite!!
:)