Thomas R Jefferys wrote:

On Wed, 7 Aug 1996, Thomas R Jefferys wrote:

Yes, we all know the scene, but even so, this is too abrupt. Start
somewhere convienent prior to this point to get us "reaquainted". We'll all
need it.

       Where would you suggest?

Probably when Genma finishes the tale about their encounter with the
Jyusenkyo springs. Try it and see.

HO! NEW THOUGHT!

Begin at the beginning, but with revisions. Subtley alter Akane's behavior
so that the readers go *hmmmmmmm* (not *she's lesbian*, but *now why did
she do THAT?*); have her carefully probe Ranma-chan to see if he/she likes
her, working up to the point where she believes that Ranma-chan likes her
and she is about to reveal *her* true feelings, when she walks in on him in
the bathroom.

Heheh! ;)

Now THAT would be cool!

--apologetic HAYES