Joseph \"Ashira\" Kohle scribed:
Okay enough with that. The LEgacy is my first fanfic, I hope I
did weel on it. As you have it it is far from done. I still have two or
three more parts to write plus some additional character development and
background development.
I hope to have th final out in a few months. It will take me
that long to revamp it. As I said this is a rough draft, I have not
personnally read through the whole thing yet, I start correcting when I
do. But i would like as much help as I can get to make sure this fanfic
is perfect. Please send me any comments and suggestions you have, whther
it is about plot, characters, or simply usage.
This is probably a result of your trying to finish the story because of your
time limit, but I felt the ending was rushed and not handled as well as
the begining was. Also, the "love conquers all" cure is a little too cliche
and didn't work for me. I did like the fact that Ranma gave up his cure
to save Ranko, though. It was a bit confusing as to when the change happens.
I thought that by giving up part of his soul to her, it would have healed her,
but it seems like she'll still depend on Ranma for strength under some
circumstances? The when of it seems vague to me. Also, this ignores the
probability that Ranma will die before her. If this happens, does she die as
well? It seems like that cursed cure needs a bit more work.
I have many more plans for fanfics right now. Most are going to
be about Ranma but I think I will throw a COmbustible Campus Guardress,
a MAcross Plus, and several Lodoss War one sin there for variety.
If I can be back online next week expect a fanfic about Ukyou
and Ranma, it will be a great one, I rpomise. Also I have a an impromptu
series in mind right now called Impressions. This will be a collection
of unrelated Ranma fanfics (okay one or two related ones but that is it)
that will explore the characters and their reactions t many different
real life problems and situations. It will be fairly serious with little
homur and several darkfics.
Also look out for my first comedy fanfic. Earthworm Kuno
Eat Bokken foul evil doer, HAHAHAHAHAHA!
Kuno I think the watermellon is dead, Sasuke the pup said
Oh gGod I must be crazy.
Well I gotta go. I'm late
Wish me luck guys. Hopefully I'll bve back next week
Sincerely
Joseph "Ashira" Kohle