On Tue, 22 Oct 1996, Richard Lawson wrote:

This was very funny.  One nitpick:

Slowly, laboriously, the words "Door-bell" pushed it's way

This should be either, the words "Door-bell" pushed their way, or, the
word "Door-bell" pushed its way (notice no apostrophe).

Whoops. Will change this...
 

If I might make a suggestion for an alternate ending:  if you could
somehow find a way for Kasumi to obliviously save Nabiki, that would be
great.

No. I had Nabs get it for a couple of reasons; one being to show Kasumi's
reaction.
   There was also the problem of how this would leave the poor hitman.
(Who, BTW, was rather Kasumilike himself.) ^_^

Still, as written, it's a chucklefest.

*smile* Glad you liked it.

Oh, and about my Kasumi being different from your Kasumi:  let me
introduce you to my friend Skuld.  "Beeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeedah!"

*laugh* Different but still well-written. ^_^ Although I must confess to
liking "Appearances" more that "Heart" - I don't know what that says about
me. ^_^

-Susan Doenime
Brisbane, U of Q
"I hit the streets / They watched me in the monitor..."