Nope. I don't think so here. Akane doesn't strike me as afraid of things
like the dark, and lightning storms. Not to mention, you're assuming
that she's scared of these things 'because she's a girl'. Not a smart
move, considering you'll probably get most of the female members on this
list screaming for your blood.
Plus, Akane wouldn't be so bold as to suggest them sleep in the same
room, let alone the same bed, and she sure as heck wouldn't go giving
him a kiss. You seem to be saying that Akane's some weak little girl
who's scared of the dark, not the strong-willed, and independant girl
she is. That's a big no-no.
Plus, while Ranma might be supporting (assuming that Akane IS what
you're portraying her as, which she isn't), he wouldn't go suggesting
that Akane sleep on his lap.
Apart from these massive errors, it's a nice little story. But the fact
is, that Akane is NOT what you seem to think she is. Give the girl
credit, I mean, Akane's not gonna let the absense of light, and the
occasional lightning strike and thunder, frighten her. She's made of
tougher stuff than that, mate. I feel that that's one of her best
qualities.....