Hello for the first time from the Draxon studios.  We at Draxon studios have 
been closely monitoring the FFML and have decided to begin our own review 
service aimed mostly at BGC and Ranma fanfictions.  Reviews will come as the 
fictions are read.  We will rate fanfictions on the following criteria:

Story:  10 = By the end of the story, you are completely amazed at the ability 
of the author to create an engrossing plot, and you die when you read anything 
hinting to the end of the fic. 1 = I managed to figure out who the bad guy 
was, what he did, and when he was defeated by reading the first paragraph.

Characterizations:  10  Flawless. Nearly no out of character.  1  = why didn't 
you make up your own people for this?

Grammar:  This is self explanatory. You get a 10 if every line is dotted, 
there are no run on sentences, etc.  If you get a 1 I am still recovering from 
dyslexia.

Graphic Description:  I am making this a separate category from Grammar.  This 
focuses on how well the author described events or emotions within the fic. 
"He laughed because it was funny" would get you a one.  Perfection yields a 
10.

FIRST REVIEW

Bubblegum Cross 14 (Parts 1 and 2)

Story: 9.  For quite a while a deep storyline has been developing in Bubblegum 
Cross, and this part is no exception.  In this part we learn more about the 
Anonymous Investor, and delve deep into Priss's past, all while progressing 
toward the eventual climax of the story at a steady rate

Characterizations: 8.5  Well done.  For the most part, the characters are IC.  
Priss's crying (which could easily be considered OOC) is caused by a massive 
mix of memories and triggers, and neatly sets the stage for more of the 
Blackie/Priss relationship should Andy choose to pursue it.

Grammar:: 8.75  The first thing I noticed about this fic Grammar-wise was the 
lack of spacing between paragraphs.  A double, or even a single spacing setup 
makes the whole package look neater, as well as conveniently making your fic 
look longer.  I noticed no other notable grammatical errors.

Descriptions: 9.5  Excellent.  Every detail of this story is vividly 
expressed.  The story has a mood all of its own, which sets it apart from most 
other BGC fics.  I eagerly await the next part.

Overall:  8.925  Excellent.  Everyone give a hand to Andy Skuse for his 
excellent work, and demand more as quickly as possible.


I think Bubblegum Collision is next in line.  I shall return, before you 
expect me... Until then, I read...

Draxon-X