Subject: Draxon's Review Corner (BGC Apotheosis 3/5)
From: "Doug Murphy" <Draxon-X@msn.com>
Date: 11/5/1996, 12:57 PM
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Story 8.8  In part three, the story advanced at a higher pace than the earlier 
parts.  It also advanced smoothly.

Characterization 9.0  Nene, your main character, is correctly represented in 
this fic.  I like her reactions to the Astral images.

Grammar. 8.7 No noticeable errors.

Descriptions: 8.9 Good.  You described all events well, notably the Astral.