Barry Cadwgan wrote:
Only one further command need be given. Squeezing her
eyes tightly shut, she thought, "I'm coming, my friends...
wait for me."
"Fire."
*****
END.
Linna dead almost before she knew it, before the despair...
Priss fighting beside her true love(?) in a blaze of glory
Christine, Mackie and Sylia, taking as many of the enemy with them as
possible, to desperatly cover and buy time for the last sacrifice.
Nene had perhaps the hardest task of all, not just to die, not just to
pull the trigger on herself, but to kill anyone who had survived the
boomers in the process. I do not think she would want to survive even if
she had the chance.
Yes. I had considered allowing her to survive it... but that would be a
fate far, far, worse than death, I think.
What can I say. A powerful story. (Chokes up a bit) Don't whatever you
do change the ending (Sad though it is), it's logic is inescapable, and
the finale... nothing more needs to be said. An epilogue would distract
from the climax, spoil it somehow, an anticlimax.
Agreed. I considered an epilogue... someone finding the recording of
her last words, and their thoughts... then decided to leave it as it
was.
Yes it is a dark story, but the light blazes brightest seen against the
dark.
Developing the character over this and the previous series to the point
where she is emotionally capable of it is... for want of a better word,
admirable. She grew under your care. I hope I can do half as well in my
story.
Thank you.
This one I'll keep.
I appreciate it, and the comments.
--
Barry Cadwgan ( BCADWGAN@FL.NET.AU )
"The end does not justify the means.
The end is the sum of the means,
as the road travelled determines the destination."
Valijon Starbringer (Hellflower Trilogy, Eluki bes Shahar)