Subject: Re: [FFML] (fanfic) (Ranma) Worse, Chapter Six V1.1
From: bastian@enterprise.mathematik.uni-essen.de (Sebastian Weinberg)
Date: 11/20/1996, 12:21 PM
To: Fanfiction ML

 On Fri, 15 Nov 1996 18:09:22 -0600 (CST) Scott Jamison said:

: A few small revisions...

: 				WORSE
: 			by Scott K. Jamison
: 			(standard disclaimer)
: 	 	Chapter Six:  In Which Ryouga Explains a Little

: 	"In my wanderings,looking for a fabled monk who could lift my curse 
: of directionlessness, I went to China, and stumbled across a place known as 
: Jyuusenkyo, the Valley of Cursed Springs."

Ah, this is better.


:       Sleep did not come immediately.  I, this body, was in love with 
: Ryouga.                               ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

What exactly is the beginning of the sentence supposed to mean?


: 	And the other major option wasn't really all that appealing 
: either.  Ranma thought of girls loving that way as weird (probably 
: something Genma had taught him early, his father had all sorts of 
: opinions that didn't match normal people's, and while she could probably 
: overcome  that conditioning, her choice of partners would be relatively 
: limited.

Uh-huh, it's better with the little explanation, although you
should close that parenthesis sometime.  :)


Sebastian
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