Monica/Akira-chan wrote:

<snip pathetic Immortals playing with the very Dragons of Heaven>

	Sigh, never did like his ending in X! Subaru had gotten my attention
long before Kamui and his ego (but then again, I guess he's entitled)
showed up on the scene. Nice to see the kid getting his own. 
	But in Highlander??? Oh well this story is great. Great detail and well
thought out dialouge. I KNEW they'd be kissing sooner or later and I not
only forgive you, I thank you for it. Well thought out and not
overshadowing the story but adding to it. Good job.

	I was a bit dissappointed at the lack of symbolism but having the new
part of his life change him and his life (cherry blossoms NEVER frame an
immortals face) I guess it was nessicary and now that I think about it,
appropriate. 

	Two things though. One, PLEASE stop putting so many characters speaking
at once in one paragraph. It's getting kinda confusing. Also, I did
think that chapt 10 was a bit heavy on the expostion but those two are
the ONLY things I could find that distracted from this otherwise great
story.

	Sigh, this is deppressing, the ONLY flaw I could find in your writing
was a slight defincy in the fight scenes (which may be because of the
story type). Other then that, heck, I might as well give up now.

	Can't wait for the rest!

Side note: Unfortuantly, Kamui seems to prefer decapitations (X movie)
so I guess Subaru is STILL out of luck ;)

(Vhat do you MEeEaAaN you don't agree vith me? Do you know vho your)
	(dealing vith?!?!?)
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