Subject: Re: [FFML] [Fanfic](delta) Bubblegum Collision part Six of Six and epilogue.
From: Andrew Schoonmaker
Date: 5/5/1997, 4:49 AM
To: fanfic@fanfic.com

At 20:32 5/2/97 +0200, you wrote:

On Sun, 27 Apr 1997 02:56:38 -0500 (CDT) Stormwalker wrote:

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: Stormwalker presents, the final battle with GENOM...
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: Stormwalker <stormwalker@airmail.net> proudly presents...
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:                       Bubblegum Collision
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:        A Bubblegum Crisis fanfiction by Douglas A. Reeves
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: Finale (part six of six) - Dead End!


Hm.  I dunno, I kinda agree with Priss:  That was too easy.  If it
was that easy for them to bring GENOM down, (particularly with the
virus planted in aticipation of such an act) I have to wonder why
they didn't do this earlier.  One would think that the crimes
committed by the GENOM corporation should be enough impetus to
embark on such an action - why did they need the added danger of
having their identities exposed to spur them into action?

Hey, I'm not alone!  OTOH, it's nice to read one of those
KS-come-in-and-wipe-the-floor-with-GENOM type of 'fics once in a while...

The final confrontation with Quincy went over too smoothly, too.
(not in terms of emotion and inner conflict, mind you - those were
masterfully orchestrated and touched me quite a lot)  I don't
figure quincy as someone who trusts in the fragile security of a
magnetically shielded, locked suite.  He would have some kind of
backup plan in case that security becomes compromised - and the
bluff he tries to pull on Nene doesn't really seem to cut it.  Why
not make the first Quincy a real android double (a genuine fake,
so to speak) but Nene discovers that it is *not* remote-controlled
>from somewhere else, but actually commanded from within the suite
(Pay no attention to the man behind the curtain...).  That way she
would still have him caught, but it's not quite as easy as you
have it now.

Hmmm...  There really isn't all that much to do to fix that (aside from the
above), at least if you want to a) keep the ending the same and b) keep
Bubblegum Collapse as part of the same continuum.


Otherwise the ending was lovely.

Agreed here.

 -Andrew