80%-90% similar to the old one, here is my rough draft of the new version.
Chapter 12+ will be completely different from now on.

Chapter 11

    Ranma sighed as he sat in the train.  Next to him was Nabiki, and some
how, whether through boredom, she had fallen asleep and was resting her
head on Ranma's shoulder.  Ranma watched intently at Nabiki, her hair
wavering as the train shot through the darkness, her lips and smooth skin.
Ranma sighed.  'And she had to become my step-sister.'  Ranma looked else
where as he tried to remember the whole point of this little train ride.

    Nodoka had looked at her son.  "You know, I think you should spend your
vacation over at your Aunt's home.  I'm sure that you would like the
beach."  Ranma sighed as he watched Ranko and Ryoga, both quite asleep and
practically on top of each other.  Akane had refused the trip, citing that
Kuno was going to take her to some special place, and Kasumi was taking
summer classes at her college, so she absolutely had no free time.

    Nabiki had been rather quick when she said that she wanted to go,
citing that she had never been to the beach.  Ranko well, she had always
loved swimming, and she immediately agreed, but not before dragging Ryoga
along with her.

    Ranma grumbled a bit on the train, thinking that Nodoka was virtually
alone with Soun.  "Damn it, mom and Mr. Tendo are going to have a ton of
free time together.  Nothing had better happen when I get back..."  Ranma,
although he knew that he probably couldn't influence the marriage anymore,
knew that at least he could have the joy of not accepting Soun as his
step-father.

    Ranma focused his attention back at Nabiki, and he noticed with slight
mirth that a slight trail of drool was dripping down from her mouth.  In
his lap, his cat was curled up, sleeping away the trip.  "I can't believe
that I'm the only one awake."  He groaned slightly, and he reached over and
wiped the drool off her face.

    Some two hours later, Ranma was distressed to notice that everyone was
still asleep.  "Ah, we've arrived.  Get up you lazy girl."  Ranko's eyes
fluttered as she looked at her brother who seemed somewhat cross.

    "Yeah, whatever."  Ranko yawned a bit, and pushed Ryoga a bit.  Her
boyfriend started to shift.  "Wake up you sleepy head!  We're there."
Ryoga groaned a bit before pushed himself into an upright position.

    Ranma picked up his cat, and placed it on his shoulder.  "You know how
Aunt Natsuko behaves when we're late."  The cat momentarily bared its fangs
at Ranko, making her shiver slightly.  Ranma tapped Nabiki.  "Hey, we're
there."  Shouldering his knapsack, the pigtailed boy was first off the train.

    Ryoga looked at Ranko.  "What's wrong Ranko?"

    "I really have to convince my brother to get rid of that cat."  Ranko
shouldered her duffle bag.  Ryoga grabbed a couple bags for his girlfriend
and walked off the train.  The others soon followed.

    As soon as all of them stepped off the train, they were greeted by Aunt
Natsuko.  "Ah, Ranma!  Ranko!  It's been such awhile since I've seen you
two!"  Natsuko hugged Ranko, and turned to Ranma.  He merely walked past her.

    "It's nice to meet you too."  Ranma muttered.  Aunt Natsuko sighed, as
she had received specific orders from her older sister to try to be as nice
to Ranma as possible.

    She glanced at Ranma as he seemingly focused his attention on his cat,
then she turned her attention to Nabiki.  "And what might be your name?"
Nabiki smiled.

    "Nabiki Tendo.  Soon to be step-sister of Ranma and Ranko."  Natsuko's
eyes light up.

    "Ah, Nodoka told me all about you and your sisters.  So this is the
first time you've been to the beach?  It's great during this time of year.
Come along now, I'm sure that two hours in a train made you all very tired."

    Natsuko eyed Ryoga for a bit.  "And what a nice looking young man.  I
hope you haven't come here to take advantage of my favorite niece."

    Ryoga turned all red.  "Me?  I wouldn't want to...  I mean..."

    Ranko burst into laughter.  "Oh don't worry Aunty, you don't need to
pull out your knives for my benefit.  If Ryoga here tries to take advantage
of me, it'll be because I asked for it."

    Natsuko smiled somewhat.  "I'm sure, and from what I've heard from your
mother, I'm sure you could standup for yourself easily."

* * *

    "I'm so sorry for the lack of space, but if it's not too hard to ask,
all of you have to stay in one room.  We had to convert one of the guest
rooms into a storage room.  I'm so sorry."  Aunt Natsuko led the foursome
to the guest room.  Opening the door, she allowed her nephew, niece and
their companions to settle into the room.

    Ranma dropped his duffle bag on the floor, and looked around.  'Not
bad, but a little small.'  Ranko sighed.  "Only two beds.  Are we going to
have to pair up during night?"  Ranko looked at Ryoga, and giggled.  Ranma
sighed as he looked at Nabiki and at the two beds.

    "Not necessary.  I'll sleep on the floor."  Within Ranma, he could feel
a tiny voice berating him for not taking advantage of the situation.  'I
don't know what would happen if I got into bed with her.'

    Nabiki seemed somewhat put off.  "Sure Ranma, thanks."  She didn't know
why he had shot her that glance before making his decision.  It sort of
made her think that something was on Ranma's mind.

    The door behind them opened, revealing a little boy.  Ranko smiled, and
kneeled in front of the boy.  "What's your name?"

    Ranma grinned a little bit, perhaps he had a soft spot for little kids.
 "Hi Tadashi."

    The boy seemed amazed.  "How do you know my name?"  Ranko looked at
Ranma as well.

    "Yeah, how did you know his name?"  Ranma shrugged his shoulders.  The
cat leaped from the bed onto Nabiki's shoulder, and came to a rest on his
shoulder.  The little boy's eyes opened wide as soon as he saw the cat.

    "A cat!  Can I play with it?  Please?  I won't hurt it!"  Ranma looked
at his cat, and then at the little boy.

    "Sure, just don't hurt the cat."  Ranma picked up the cat, and placed
it on the boy's head.

    "Oh yeah, Mom wanted to say that she wanted to see all of you having
fun, so you can spend all the time you want at the beach.  If you just need
anything, you can ask her."  The boy placed the cat on the ground, "Let's
go swimming."  He ran off with the cat chasing after him.

    Everyone could sort of hear Ranko breath a sigh of relief.

* * *

    Ranko looked at Ranma.  "Come on, why won't you come swimming with
Ryoga and I?"  Ranma shrugged his shoulders as he closed his eyes and tried
to sleep.  His sister glared at him.  "Well, I won't stand for it.  Ryoga!
Help me carry Ranma!"

    "What!?  Hey, let go of me!  You know I don't like to swim.  Hey!"
Ryoga and his sister grabbed a hold of Ranma, and were carrying him by his
hands and feet towards the water.

    "In you go!"  shouted his sister, and Ranma found himself
unceremoniously dumped into the warm, salty water.  Everyone else broke
into laughter.

    "Ranko!  I'll get you!"  In seconds, Ranko found herself briefly
submerged.  She spit out a mouthful of water.

    "Hey!  That wasn't fair!"  Ranko glared at the two boys, who were sort
of laughing.  "Hey, Nabiki!  Would you mind giving your step-sister a hand
here?  These two morons here are picking on me!"

    A smile appeared on Nabiki face as she stood up.  "Sure."  Ryoga could
almost swear that he heard Ranma curse under his breath.

    However, that did not become a problem, as the water served to cool
down tensions and for once, Ranko would admit, Ranma did seem quite happy,
playing in the water, as if he didn't have a care in the world.

* * *

    Ranma walked out of the bathroom, with his face somewhat ashen.  His
fun in the water had finally caught up to him, and after a day of lounging
in the sun and getting blown by the cool breeze while wet, he could feel a
sickness coming over him.  He looked so bad, that when he walked into the
bedroom, three concerned people looked at him.

    "You don't look so hot, Ranma."  Ryoga looked at Ranma closely.

    "Yeah."  Ranko looked at him.

    "Never mind, it was too much sun.  I think I'm going to sleep."  Ranma
unrolled the sleeping bag, and he settled into sleep.  But sleep was not
going to last long, as there was a scream coming from the bathroom.

    Ryoga and Ranko were first to respond, and the two were out of their
bed and down the hall, and into the bathroom.  There was Tadashi, draped in
a towel, staring at the cat, which was all wet. The cat immediately shook
itself dry, and ran out of the room.  Ranko couldn't help but notice a
trickle of red blood dripping from poor Tadashi's nose.

    "B-b-big o-on-ones and l-lo-long hair," said the little boy.

    Ranko kneeled down next to the boy.  "What did you see?"

   Tadashi turned to Ranko.  "I saw a woman.  I was going to wash, and when
the cat went into the water, it turned into a girl."  He paused to wipe his
nose dry.

    Ranko turned to Ryoga and started to laugh somewhat.  "Sure, Tadashi.
I'll be sure to tell that to Ranma."  As the two left the bathroom, she
couldn't help but laugh a little.  "Ryoga, whoever heard of a cat turning
into a woman?  Poor Tadashi must be suffering from heat exhaustion."

* * *

    Nabiki was awakened by the sounds of coughing.  Rolling over in her bed
she looked down at Ranma, who was not asleep at all.  Contrarily, he seemed
to be wide awake staring at the ceiling.  "Hey, Ranma are you ok?"  He
coughed raggedly.

    "Yeah, I'm fine."

    "You are the worst liar I've ever seen.  Climb in."  Nabiki sat up as
if she were going to go on the floor.  "I'll sleep in the sleeping bag.
Besides,"  she continued, "I can't sleep at all with you making all of that
noise."

    "What do you mean?  I can't possibly do that.  Good night."  Ranma
settled back down.  Nabiki grumbled something.

    Unable to express her displeasure with his coughing, she rolled over
and looked at him.  "You sure are stubborn."

    His eyes flashed open, and he looked straight into her eyes.  "You are
way too patronizing.  And if you excuse me, I want to get some sleep."

    Nabiki laid on her back, wide awake as she listened to Ranma cough a
couple times.  Unable to bear it any longer, Nabiki rolled over.  "Get in,
now."  Ranma's eyes opened again, and she couldn't help but notice a
mixture of fear as well as interest in his eyes.

    "You what?"

    "You heard me.  Get in, or I'm going to spend the entire night
listening to you cough."

    "But, I don't think it's right..."

    "Shut up, and get in.  But no funny business."  She realized that he
hadn't moved yet.  "Get in, or I'm going to pick you up and put you in the
bed."

    With a groan, Ranma climbed into the bed, and Nabiki rolled over,
leaving plenty of room between the two.

* * *

    At daybreak, a pair of eyes shot open immediately.  Looking around, the
eyes tried to determine the location.  They looked to the left, and found a
bed some distance away.  They looked to the right, and found girl no more
than one foot away.  Ranma practically leaped out of bed.

    He looked around, and had realized that he had spent the entire night
in bed with Nabiki.  'Oh great, am I a pervert!  What would the others
think!  Oh jeez, am I going to Hell?'  Looking around, there was not an
indication that anyone had seen him, and with a sigh of relief, he grabbed
his duffel bag, and began to dress.

    As sleep slowly left Ranma, details from the night before entered his
mind.  Glancing at Nabiki, who was deep asleep, Ranma bent down, until
there faces were no more than inches apart.  He tried to move forward, but
he refused to do so.  Instead, he whispered.  "Thank you."

    He slowly pulled away.  "You're welcome."  He froze, and looked back.
Nabiki yawned a bit, and she slowly sat up.  "What were you going to do?"

    Ranma locked up for a bit, but he managed to free his tongue.
"Nothing.  I'm going for breakfast."  Calmly he left the room.  She sighed.

   Not too long later, the other people in the room started to stir.  "What
a beautiful morning!"  Ranko exclaimed.  "Hey, wait a sec, where is Ranma?"

    "He went to get breakfast."  Nabiki sat up in bed, and yawned again.
She still couldn't believe that Ranma had woken up that early.  It still
was only 10 o'clock.  "He doesn't like to sleep, does he?"  Ranko shrugged
her shoulders, and thumped Ryoga in the stomach playfully.

    "Geez!  What are you trying to do?  Kill me?"  Sitting up, he leaped
onto Ranko and started to tickle her.

* * *

    "So, Aunty Natsuko, where is Ranma?"  Ranko asked while stuffing her
mouth with rice gruel and other stuff.  By now, Ryoga was quite used to her
appetite, but Tadashi and Nabiki sat there staring at her as she finished
her second bowl.

     Natsuko smiled somewhat as she returned from the kitchen with yet
another bowl for Ranko.  "I'm not so sure.  I think Ranma might be outside.
 I haven't seen him much today, he went outside when I just woke up."

    Ranko frowned some what.  "And I was hoping that he'd want to be with
Ryoga and me."  Well, that wasn't really the case as Ranko really wanted to
check up on Ranma, to make sure he wasn't in trouble and such.

    Ranma sighed as he sat on the edge of the cliff, looking out at the
water crashing into the beach below.  He hated being alone, but it was one
of those rare moments that he could feel proud for himself.  He didn't have
someone to pamper him.  There was no person to do something for him.  He
just did everything to the best of his ability, and he could be proud of that.

    Next to him was his cat, who was seated looking down at the smooth
white sand.  It shivered slightly.  Ranma somehow felt it shiver.  "Scared
of falling?"  Ranma pushed his cat back away from the edge.  "Funny isn't
it?  It takes roughly 1.5 seconds for you to fall from here."  He leaned
forwards slightly to get a better view of the ground.

    "Hey, what are you looking at?"  Turning around, Ranma was practically
face-to-face with Nabiki.  "You know your sister is worried sick about
you?"  Without waiting for a response, Nabiki settled down next to Ranma.
"So what brings you to this place?  There certainly is nothing here to look
at."

    "Exactly."  Ranma turned to Nabiki, and she was surprised by the
relative lack of emotion in his eyes.

    "So why are you here?"

    "Because it's a chance for me to be alone and to think."  He felt his
cat brushing its head against his arm, and automatically like a reflex, he
petted it.

    "Sometimes I wish I could do that, but believe me, with my sisters and
father that is impossible."  Nabiki sighed as she dangled her legs in the
air.  Strangely enough, being on the edge had a certain thrill for her.
One couldn't say the same for Ranma.  "God," she said while looking down,
"falling from here won't be a pretty sight."

    Ranma snickered.  "It's nothing.  1.5 seconds of flight, and a nasty
hit on the bottom.  The most you get is a couple broken bones and a lot of
sand in your mouth."

    "And how would you know?"

    "Let's say, one day, a long time ago like when I was 11, I decided to
take a fall at this very point."

* * *

    "Ranko let me get this straight, Ranma decided to just jump from there
when he was 11?"  Nabiki was pointing at a cliff no more than 50 feet high
in the distance.  A young man could be seen perched on the edge looking out
at the water.

    Ranko looked somewhat nervous, and she shoved her hands into her
pockets.  "Well, what did he say?"  She stared at Nabiki, amazed that Ranma
would actually tell someone that spontaneously.

    "I don't know, I just said that it was scary up there, and he
practically laughed.  He said that it was nothing."

    Ranko looked as if she was really tired.  "Figures, Ranma in those days
didn't give a crap about himself."  She turned to look at Ranma in the
distance.  "Well, I wouldn't worry about him now."  As she looked at Ryoga,
a smile crept onto her face.  "Come along, we need to get wet."

    "Yes, ma'am."

    Nabiki stood there, and she too stared out at the cliff before
following Ranko onwards.

* * *

    "Isn't the moon beautiful?"  The was a small affirmative meow that
seemed to agree with Ranma.  "Well, it is getting late."  With a small
groan, Ranma pushed himself away from the ledge and stood up.  "We ought to
be going back, no?"

    The cat meowed again.  "I just hope when I take a bath, I don't bother
the others.  Want to take a bath with me?"  Ranma laughed when the cat
practically jumped.  "Of course you don't, cats hate water."  Bending down,
he carefully picked up the cat and held it as he walked down the slanted,
rocky path back to the house.

    Quietly opening the door, Ranma looked at the clock.  "Great, it's
midnight," he whispered.  He dropped the cat on the floor to do as it
wished, and he walked into the bathroom.  Surprisingly the cat followed him
in.

    Stripping himself free of his clothes, he grabbed the shower head and
cleaned himself off before he walked into the tub filled with hot water.
Ranma made a personal note to thank his Aunt tomorrow for filling the tub.
The cat did not look directly at him while he bathed.

    Having been refreshed after some 10 minutes, Ranma climbed out of the
tub and proceeded to dry himself off, facing away from the cat.  This was
not a good thing, as for once, the cat could see the nasty white lines and
scars that were on Ranma's back, a permanent reminder from the accident.

    Ranma finally put on some clothes, and the cat was able to move again.
The first thing that the cat did was rub itself against Ranma's ankles.
"Hey, please stop it?  It's sort of ticklish."  He managed to easily
suppress laughter, and he picked up the cat.  "I think it was time that we
went to sleep."

    After carefully sneaking down the hallway, Ranma carefully opened the
door and let himself into the room.  Silently, he was about to climb into
his sleeping bag, when he heard a tired voice.  "Ranma, what the hell are
you doing up so late?"  He heard a body move in the bed next to him.

    "Nothing.  Go back to sleep.  I'm sorry that I woke you."

    "Oh, it's nothing.  I couldn't sleep at all."  There was a tired yawn
from Nabiki.

    "That's too bad."  Ranma pulled his sleeping bag a little bit.  He
could hear the cat crawling around as if playing with the sleeping bag.

    "You're not going to cough again tonight?  I really need my sleep.  If
you want to, feel free to sleep in the bed."  Ranma could hear her rolling
over as if to make room.  He stood there for a moment.  'So what shall I
do?  Should I take advantage of her offer?  Shall I refuse her offer?'

    Well in the end, Ranma grumbled a bit as he climbed into the bed next
to Nabiki.  With a sigh, he made sure he was facing away from Nabiki.
There was an angry hiss from his cat.  "You can get in as well."  Ranma
lifted the covers a little, and he felt something rush past him and land
between him and Nabiki.  "Not there, you'd get suffocated."  Ranma lifted
his cat and deposited it on the other side of his body.

* * *

    Nabiki woke up to the sound of soft laughter.  Groaning a bit, Nabiki
found herself snuggled against Ranma.  He was still dead asleep.  Evidently
he was tired from going to bed rather late last night.  "I don't know how
you did it, but you've managed to get Ranma to be in the same bed with
you?"  Ranko was perched at the foot of the bed staring at the two.

    Nabiki instantly woke up and she practically pulled away from Ranma.
"And how did I end up..."

    Ranko's face filled with mock horror.  "And wow, you even got him to
hug you."  Nabiki found Ranma's arm indeed had wrapped around her during
their sleep.  Certainly, there had been a lot of interesting movement
during their slumber.  "You must had done something really impressive to
get him to do that."

    Nabiki picked up her pillow and tossed it at Ranko.  "Hey, nothing
happened."  But that was not a wise move, as the sudden movement caused
Ranma's eyes to immediately open.  He immediately felt a little pressure on
his right arm, and turning his head he saw that Nabiki was on his arm.

    "Oh great."  Ranma muttered.