At 12:33 AM 5/15/1997 -0500, Redneck Gaijin wrote:

On Wed, 14 May 1997 17:08:05 -0400, Lizsue <lizsue@MIT.EDU> wrote:

Actually, I found the whole thing disappointing. The flashback is virtually
the entire story, and it takes too long and wanders all over the place when

The flashback is supposed to be the main story.  That grilled sandwich Akane 
wants is a metaphor for the whole thing - crunchy at the edges and gooey 
cheese in the middle.  Actually, it wasn't; I just made that up now.

the point is made as quickly as a fifth of the way in. The parents'
statement at the end comes way outta left field. Also, of all four of the

You think so?  I thought the whole thing came way outta left field.

main contenders in the Ranma Sweepstakes, Kodachi is the -least- believable
to have explain herself to Ranma. Simply put, she's not -sane- enough, at

She wouldn't have bothered to explain if Ranma didn't ask her.

least as I understand it, to rationally explain her hangups.

This story just didn't do anything to me or for me. If this is it, it needs
much work; if there's more, then maybe it'll make more sense with all the
pieces in place.

This is it, but I'll probably need to add more stuff to get the mood and 
plot to work well.