Nabiki...cooking?!?! Oy vey, Ryoga's really done a number on her to spur her
to this extreme, huh?

Ryoga seemed a tad OOC when he was talking to Ukyo...doesn't mean I don't
like it though! The rocking was a very sweet touch. I'm going to root for
those two to get together.

When Mousse made his exit, I got confused on how Tsubasa was knocked
unconscious. I thought it was Tsubasa who fell upon the truck instead of
Mousse.  You may want to make that passage more clearer.

Looking forward to the next chapter!
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/===\     LaShawn M. Taylor (shonnie@zeus.anet-chi.com)     MST#83924
|^ ^|\    "Don't stand there gawking! You act as if you never saw the hand
 \v/\|    of God before!"     -Monty Python's "The Meaning of Life"	  
    |\    "You know the thing that haunts me the most were all those
    \|    crystalline moments, where adrenaline and light filled my belly
	  and head, and the moon winked as if to say 'Yes'..."
				-Poi Dog Pondering "God's Gallipoli"	
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