More Project A-ko.

was beginning to

grate on her nerves.

This expression began to grate on my nerves a few decades ago and time

hasn't improved it any.



There really are only two cases here, either:



    A> Her highness really is agitated and this comment is redundant

    with words, actions and thoughts to follow.



    or



    B> She isn't and you're lying.



More of this sort of redundant "pre-comment" cliche follows.

arms splayed to either side.

To be splayed, things must point in not-quite the same direction, not

not-quite opposite directions.  If she was holding her arms out in front

of herself they could be splayed.

stood hugging one another

in the office,

Lot of that going around the palace these days.  Thank goodness none of

them are guys, eh?

When all

parties required had gathered, she rose from her seat and called for

silence.

In order to call for silence, it must already be absent.



What were they talking about?

when she had assumed that her target would be sleeping and gone for

a sandwich.

The target sleepwalks down to the 7-11?

Eiko almost dropped her coffee over that response.

She's naturally sorta clumsy, so why not let her actually drop the cup,

then snatch it up in time so as to only spill a few drops.  You get a

little more action into the story that way.

"Mommy... why do you have those?  You wear them all the time."

And the kid doesn't?



I watched through the kindergarten sequence again and I can't tell, from

either story if Eiko's got the bracers or not.  I always figured that

Eiko's misbehavior at this time was the wake-up call for her parents.



	Henry J. Cobb	hcobb@slip.net          http://www.io.com/~hcobb