Interesting so far. BTW Thanks for the other chapters. I dont have
sandpaper gloves but here s a few comments.

The story seemed....whimsical?   disjointed? The base premisis is good
but there were so many threads running through  it was tough to follow.
I was wondering if you were going to seize on one at a time and follow
it out.

 Kasimi chasing Tofuu,Nabs living with the Kunos,Akane and Kuno,Kaori
and Ranma,Kodachi calling Nabs oneechan (which i like a lot )the rumors
about Ranma, Yuka, National Enquirer spokeswoman(TM) and so on.

Will Tofuu wise up? What about Kaori and her devotion to Ranma? Is Ranma
brain dead not to notice Kaori? He seems to have no feelings for Akane
(yay yay!!) so why not  Kaori?

Maybe you could end or at least tidy some of these up before introing
more charas.It could only get more akward if not. I do think that Ranma
may be in danger of being wrote out too.Personally i'd love to see a fic
in which Arrogant Saotome is not the focus for once and he *loses* Akane
to Kuno.

No flames please i burn easily ,no spam please i'm on a diet. 


As always con3@webtv.net