thanks to everyone who took the time to comment on the two versions of
"sunset" i posted this past weekend! anyway, i know you're probably sick of
the darn story line, so i already polished it up for the last time and
intend to post it to the RAAC right after I finish sending this message.

btw, the version that i worked on was version 2 -- most of the people who
answered me preferred that version to the first one because it was more
vivid and it flowed better than the other one. i reread both, and version 2
did flow better, although i guess some commments in the first version were
more like the manga. unfortunately, peaceful settings and original flavor
stories don't mix very well without leaving people feel disoriented at the
mood swings. never mind, i'll test my wings on a more "original flavor" type
story when i have the time to write again -- because at the moment, plant
and fungi reproductive anatomy is my main concern.(Is it possible to
incorporate that into a fic?:P Darn but I hate school.

again,thank you for your c&c -- it means you took the time to read both
stories, and i really appreciate that! it makes me want to keep on writing.:) 

CBear