I would like to add my two cents worth to this story.  First, I would like to
say that I like what I've seen so far.  Nice flair for drama.  And I like the
treatment of the characters.  But now onto a nitpick.

The scene is the phone call between Nabiki and Ukyo.  Nabiki earlier
explained to Ukyo that Ranma had declared that "he"  was dead and now was
going by the name of "Ranko."Near the end of the conversation, there was this
statement by Nabiki.

<< I hope so.  As it is, when she wakes up she will be really pissed.  You
 just focus on Ranma now.  >>
                     ^^^^^^^^

Excuse me, but shouldn't that be "You just focus on Ranko now."?  Now, maybe
I'm out of line here, but Nabiki did refer to Ranma as Ranko at the beginning
of the call.

Otherwise, keep up the good work.

James Holzhauer (aka Tobimaro [Ton-chan])
       ---fanfic reader-at-large   (and also in lurking)