Hey, again I liked it.
One thing, you might want to work on the length
of your lines.  That wraparound makes it kinda hard
to read.(as some people have told me before.)

"Hey!  I'm kinda cute!" she said, striking a pose.

<choke>

She then started squeezing her breasts and giggled.

<thud> I gotta move that keyboard.

The traveled alon and did not

Um I think you meant alone.  (damn I corrected a spelling
error is the world ending yet?)

And, Special thanks to Sir Olin, fellow Disciple of Eriond, for his
encouragement
and his alternate storyline.  I hope he writes it one day.

<weak laughter> Well um...too late.  I am loth to post is as I am
afraid of taking on too many stories at a time.  (oops too late there
as well.)  Anyways if ya wanna see it I'll send it if I get enough
people asking for it.  Otherwise it will stay on my hard drive for
a while.  Oh for anyone who is wondering the Ranmariad ch5
should be coming out on thursday.  I'll also be doing some small
rewrites to the previous parts shortly.  Sometime next week
The Path Not Taken - Letters should come out.  It will be a
collection of the three alternate letters that Ranma wrote to
Akane.(if anyone still remembers the story)  The Ranma
Rifts crosover is now tennatively entitled Ranma 1/2 Bachi
(thanks Turbo) and I am sorta stuck on that one.  I know
what I want to write I just can't write it like I want.  Anyway
that's it for now.

See Ya!

Olin
http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Temple/3488/index.html