Date: Sun, 24 Aug 1997 20:12:04 +0800

	The phone clicked and Nabiki set the receiver down.  "At least=20

that's finished."  That was the second time that day that she had to 
=20
	Mousse woke up to find Shampoo peering over him with jaded >of her 

hate and waited for the water to become more bearable.  Her=20

sis.  Maybe someone getting what he deserved..."
	"Who got what, Nabiki?" Soun questioned her from the dining table. =20

life=20

but never did.  To say...
	"I think the okonomiyaki's getting cold."
He forced tears back, praying to the gods for a sign that the girl of 

his=20

dreams will forgive him....  Just one little sign.

	"Ranma!"  Kodachi's ribbon was tangled by the footsteps of the=20

rapidly vanishing group.
Anyway, please send any comments.  The silence sucks.  Please, just 

tell me anything.  If you send, "we hate your fic," I will go down on my 
knees and thank you, at least you saw this.

Don't worry--It's good.  Very good.  Solid characterizations, and you 
have a definite grasp on the workings and feel of the Rumikoverse.

One quibble--Verb tense.  Bouncing back and forth between past and 
present tense can cause a bit of distraction.  Beyond that though...Good 
stuff.

Watch out for the next thrilling chapter, Bumps and Bruises, around 

next month.  Coming soon to a text file near you.

I, for one, will hold you to that.

----Freemage


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