On Thu, 18 Sep 1997 UkyouKwnji@aol.com wrote:

She Deserves Better

A Ranma1/2 fanfiction
by Ukyou Kuonji

Hiroshi related this incident to me, and Daisuke confirmed its 
veracity (On the other hand, Nabiki and Akane denied it vehemently 
-- you can believe who you want to).  Anyway, it supposedly happened 

:)

shortly before Ran-chan arrived in Nerima...

  “Sorry?  Whaddya mean?  She’s got every boy at Furinkan salivating 
after her.  Who wouldn’t wanna be in her shoes?”

Me, for one.  I'm not _that_ kind of guy! :D

  “Hey, ‘Rosh.  If yer not gonna eat yer bento, can I have it?”
  “Hunh?”  I snapped out of it, and looked at my lunch.  I hadn’t 
touched it.  Well, that was easily remedied.  I dug it, heartily.

What, did he have it buried somewhere? :D

Somehow, I think you meant 'dug in'.

I continued calmy eating my breakfast, but I couldn’t help thinking 
that if this were just a cartoon, this scene would be pretty damn 
funny.

:D

for the stairs, her long hair bouncing behind her. And me sitting on 
them, finishing my breakfast.

Is he sitting on the stairs, or her hair?

  She hadn’t the time to react; indeed, I couldn’t tell if she even
realized what I had done until it was too late.  She stepped onto 
the peel with her right foot, which promptly shot out from under 
her, and pitched her forward onto her face.

It wasn't really her _foot_ that pitched her forward, was it?

  I tried to pick her up and carry her in my arms, but I didn’t 
have that kind of strength.  I looked up at the school building.
All sorts of kids were staring out at the scene.  I spotted my 
homeroom and called out:
  “Hey, Daisuke!  Gimme a hand getting her to the nurse’s station.
And bring the ten thou, will ya?”  Hey, if I’m gonna embarrass myself
by being unable to carry her on my own, the least I could do was to 
pass the embarrassment along to Daisuke for losing the bet.

This should be one paragraph, or the paragraph break should be somewhere
else.

  We walked the rest of the way back to class in silence.  Just 
before we opened the door, he turned to me.
  “Well, ‘Rosh... d’ya still feel sorry for her?”  I had to think 
about it for a moment.
  “No, I guess not.  And, ya know something?”
  “What?”
  “It’d serve her right if she winds up with a guy that’ll cause 
her as much pain and heartache as she does to the rest of us.”
  “Amen to that, bro.”  And we headed on into class.

:>:>:>:>:>

Yeah, I agree.  (Just so you know, as undoubtedly _some_ people won't
agree. :)

One small complaint, though.  Some of the punctuation marks (most notably
the quotation marks and apostrophes) are not encoded in standard ASCII.
On my system, they're displaying as funky international characters.


- Sean Connor (sec@frodo.com)  
 
        "It jams." - Intel TV ad, referring to the Pentium chip.