There's an old saying... "If you can't understand what's going on, then
you're watching terrific anime." I got the same sense from this fic. What
the -HECK- is going on here?

When Akane opened her eyes she didn't find Ranma in front of her.  She
refocused her sights and immediately recognized the dull whiteness of
the ceiling.  Slowly she rose up from the comforts of her bed.  "Darn,
it's the same dream again."  Realizing she could go back to sleep, Akane
walked out of her room and quietly proceeded to the kitchen.

It was fine up until this point... then...

"You know?  The wedding tomorrow."  Akane felt a cold breeze blowing in
the room just as the words reached her.  "I sure hope everything turns
up fine tomorrow."  Ranma checked the clock on the far wall.  "Make that
later."

Ok... umm... this is getting a little confusing...

"Ranma, are we getting married tomorrow?"  Akane saw that Ranma almost
choked after she asked her question.  "I mean later."

I'm still not -completely- confused... Akane could just be insecure and
asking for confirmation...

"You're kidding right?  Come on Akane, we've been through this for weeks
now."  Ranma felt he was being jeered on by Akane's bewildered look, but
somehow Akane really looked like she didn't know anything at all.  "Oh
boy."

Still not -too- bad...

"Who's getting married later?"

"Damn, you forgot again.  I just reminded you only yesterday."

"Ranma!  Who's getting married?"

Ok, what? Why is she asking 'who'? Ranma just said it. And forgot 'again'?

"I can't believe you'd forget all about it all of a sudden!"  Ranma
bolted off the table and was about to leave the kitchen.  "Damn, Akane.
We've spent months talking about it.  Took us weeks to get everyone to
finally concede, and now you're telling me you forgot everything.  I
wished you never found..." Ranma immediately stopped when he felt
someone grasp his hand.  "Huh?"

First it was weeks. Now it's months. And he wishes that she never found...
what?

"I'm sorry Ranma.  But I really don't remember.  I had a dream last
night..." Ranma immediately found himself embracing Akane.   "I really
don't."

"You had that dream again?  The one when I proposed to you?"  Akane was
surprised how Ranma could possibly know exactly what she was talking
about.  "Akane, that happened a year ago.  Remember?"  Akane tried, but
nothing flashed in her mind.  "I guess not."  Ranma and Akane returned
to the table and continued their conversation there.

"You proposed to me a year ago?"  Ranma felt irritated a bit but soon he
decided to just smile.

Ok... this still matches the scant continuity we've had up until this point...

"Yes, Akane.  We've been married for a year now."  Ranma blinked and he
winced realizing what he had just said.  "Damn.  Our anniversary is
coming up.  What do you want to do?  I heard the beaches are great this
time of the year."  Akane shook her head in dismay.

O.o -Nani-? First they're -about- to get married, now they've been married
for a year? O.o @_@

Later...

"I'm not comfortable sleeping with someone."

"What?  We've slept before..." Ranma suddenly realized Akane's real
problem.
"You don't remember anything, right?"

"I already told you..." Akane felt something warm crawling up her back.
"Ranma don't you dare!"

"We're husband and wife.  What's wrong with this?"  Akane tried to ward
off Ranma's roaming hands.  "Besides, you've done it before."

"But I don't remember!"

"Exactly.  Don't you want to have a second 'first time'?"  Ranma now had
his arms where he wanted them.

"Ranma!  Stop it."  Akane's resistance lessened even further.  "No.
Don't do that.  Ranma!"  Soon their voices died down and the room was
almost quiet again.

"Oh, Ranma!"

"He, he, he."

A few hours later, the bodies had stopped moving, and both were wearily
fast asleep.

At this point, I'm thinking that Ranma is just playing with Akane's head so
that she'll sleep with him... though that doesn't seem like a thing that
Ranma would do...

"What exactly was the reason I told you to sleep on the roof?"  Ranma
was enjoying recalling what had happened last night that he failed to
recognize the trap Akane laid out for him.

What trap would this be? We never hear about this 'trap' again.

"What!"  The sudden outburst immediately interrupted the whole wedding,
and everyone stared at Akane, who was looking intensely furious.  "Ryoga
is P-chan!  My pet P-chan!"

Ok... where did THAT come from? O.o

Ryoga and Ukyou stared at each other.  Everyone was caught surprised by
the next events.

Before everyone realized what was happening the groom was running out
the dojo.  Ryoga was running for his life.  "Damn it Ranma.  I thought
she forgot all about it?!"

Ranma was running along with him.  "Long story man.  Just keep running!"
The two jumped up the fence and headed out into the streets.

It would be nice if the long story was explained to -us-...

"Get back here you two!  BAKA!  I'll get you for this Ryoga!  Ranma!"

"Ranma, how the hell did she remember?!"

"Actually, she forgot!  Duck!"  The two narrowly missed a projectile
thrown to them by their pursuer.  "Damn, we're doing this all over
again.  Like the first one wasn't bad enough!"

See... I assume that this sentence would make sense if we had a bit more
background... unfortunately, we don't.

"What do you think?  Would Dr. Tofu be already back to normal by now?"
Ryoga rounded a corner with Ranma following suit.

What is meant by "back to normal"?

Later...

A few hours later since the disastrous wedding everything, seems to be
back to normal.

Umm... you might want to re-write this sentence... this smacks of a
sentence half-written, the author running off to take care of something,
and then coming back to write the end, resulting in complete incoherency...

"I'm glad you two decided to get married."  Akane and Ukyou embraced
each other.

"I have you to thank, Akane."

Umm... why?

Both of them looked at the their husbands who were slumped on the couch
in the living room, and both were dead tired and fast asleep.

First everyone hates each other, and now they're relaxed?

"They sure picked a strange time to sleep?"  Akane and Ukyou just
laughed.

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The End

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C&C greatly appreciated (public and private will do)

This was an hour fic....

This seems like you wrote two completely different fics and then cut/pasted
paragraphs from each into it... no offense, or anything... it just doesn't
make any sense! n_n;;

- Adam

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God does not play dice with the universe; He plays an ineffable game of His
own devising, which might be compared, from the perspective of any of the
other players, to being involved in an obscure and complex version of poker
in a pitch-dark room, with blank cards for infinite stakes, with a Dealer
who won't tell you the rules, and who *smiles* all the time.

-- Terry Pratchett & Neil Gaiman, "Good Omens"

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