One comment about the beginning of this fic. Shampoo crashes into Ranma
with her bike, pulls his mouth in the form of a smile, Akane gets mad and
stomps on Ranma's face. Isn't this taken directly from the OAV series
"Desperately Seeking Shampoo"? :)

On Wed, 31 Dec 1997, Kyo Kusanagi wrote:

As for Ranma taunting Akane into hitting him, remember he was basically
going thru a Ryoga stage of depression/hate/etc at that point, you think he
actually cared after what Akane said?

Nodnod, this provides an interesting insight into Ranma 1/2. How WOULD
Akane react if Ranma got tired of being constantly bashed around? Now
everyone has a chance to sort out their feelings about Ranma, and Ranma
gets a chance to think clearly about his fiancee situation. 

About the Bakusai-Tenketsu not working on Ranma's face, i didn't know that,
so sue me ;)

Bakusai Tenketsu does not work on living objects, only on rock/concrete. I
think this skill was explained in the episode where Ryouga first got it. 
In the manga Cologne tells Ranma that Bakusai Tenketsu does not work on
living things. 

Chapters 2 and 3 have been done, tho i prolly won't post them until i get
suggestions/comments etc.

Well, all the more incentive for us to comment a lot, eh? :)

I'll say now that Chapter 2 does involve Ranma and Shampoo 'going at it' (ie
lemon scene). That also leads to a mistake with some anti-curse powder and
the result is that Ranma gets split into his 2 diff sides. It also sees
Ranma and Akane making up after a while (i have been thinking on changing
this).

Lemon scene? Thank you thank you thank you! :) You will have to plan it
carefully though or else it will become a bit OOC. And IMHO using
something like "Passion Spice" is too easy. Good lemon scenes between less
common pairings (like Ranma/Shampoo, Ranma/Ukyou, Ryouga/Akane) are scarce
to find and hard to write, but I like them; I hope you are successful in
portraying this well. :)

Splitting Ranma into two sides, eh? I wonder how the fiancees would react
to Ranko. Shampoo would probably concentrate her attentions on Ranma
(remember the Amazon law that states an Amazon must kill a woman outsider
that defeats her), although she might still try to be friends with Ranko.
Ukyou and Akane (especially Ukyou) would probably be more understanding
though.

The Nullifier spinoff fic (I forgot who the author was) with Ranko
seducing Ukyou comes to mind here. :)

Chapter 3 sees basically the beginning of the problems when everyone who
would be participating in the upcoming tournament begin sensing strange
presences around as 'shadows' infiltrate to gather information. One of them
'attacks' Ran-ko, basically setting up the stage for the 'Jusenkyo's Full
Moon - Awakened Saotome Ran-ko'(basically a possessed state) later on. I'll
also say that later, Ryoga also gets the same treatment as 'Jusenkyo's Full
Moon - Insane Hibiki Ryoga' The title says it all ;)

You're not going to actually call her "Ran-ko" instead of "Ranko" are you?
:) That dash just looks so tedious.

Great, I hope you send out chapters 2 and 3 soon. :)

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Heh, ever think of making those Kanji a bit more clear? :) Its hard to see
where the lines connect and stuff, but I guess its not so easy to do that
with ASCII art.

-Philip Mak (pmak@cs.dal.ca)