At 06:59 PM 2/14/98 -0800, Henry J. Cobb wrote:

My name is Kuonji Ukyou

My bet is that Tenchi is the one who tags her with the cute tag.

Naa, that would be Akane.^_^

Tenchi's sister had come as a
complete surprise.  She had no idea Tenchi had one.

In fact she's had ample evidence during her snooze that her prince
charming doesn't have one.

Nope, she never saw Ranma at the cave, but that means nothing. She could
only view things around the perimeter. Tenchi could easily have a sister
she never saw. Not likely, but possible.

Maybe after she had worn Tenchi out to-night, she'd pay Ranma a
visit.  A little spice to go with her sugar.

Another Ryouko and Ayeka fan I see.

Not nessesarily, She's has no reason to dislike Ranma, yet , And I sort of
see her as not being that discriminating. 

Ryouko swore long and imaginatively under her breath. She
needed the power jewels in  Tenchi's hilt to re-establish the
connections required to order Ryo-oh-ki to full activation.

Maybe if she'd indicate which Tenchi she was hilting on.

Oh, that's bad, Good going
Hehehe

might make it easier to talk Tenchi into handing over the family
jewels.

Like this.

A split screen formed, on one side was Tenchi's imagination,
on the other Ranma's.

Too animangy, thinking in manga terms might be better here.

I seen almost no Tenchi Manga, My main source and inspiration comes from
the OVA's, so I tend to think in visual effects.

"Tenchi, give
me your balls.  Now!"

She knows what she wants and isn't afraid to say so.

Have to like that in a lady.

"Are you sure this is on?"

Hey, she paid for that mic.

Now that there was no
turning back, they could not help but wonder if they had done the
right thing.  What had they unleashed?

Why not show this discussion then?

I'm lazy. I just could not picture an argument that would convince Ranma it
was a good idea to let her have the jewells.

Ranma: What do we need her for, we can kick that devils butt all on our own.

"There now, that should give me a chance to
get to know my future daughter-in-law, and to talk her out of
extracting vengeance on Genma."

Yeah, she's such a traditional Japanese girl that you've taken her to
heart already.

Well, if Ukyou is telling the truth, it's not like she'd have any choice in
the matter, As a matter of fact, this will give her a chance to rebuild her
future daughter in law to her own specifications.

"Akane?  What are you doing here?"

"Well, the author figured that a dozen girls crowded around Tenchi was a
little low, but I hate boys anyway so..."

Aa, I see you've found the crux of this stories problem, way to many girls.
Don't worry, The ladies will have suitors in tow when they show up at
Tenchi's. Not that they want them. And I do mean 'all' the ladies.

I just got a vision of P-chan and Ryo-oh-ki, ugh!

P-chan is going to be just a little different in this fic.

"Meow," had been  the sound, and it had come from
everywhere.  Just like before.

"Yes, my son, er daughter is so afraid of giant transforming spaceships
that..."

hehehe

Forgetting all pretense of
dignity,

It seems to be the only sort of dignity she's got.

"She had the genetic traces that are part of the royal familie's
code.  All royal guardians are equipped to register that particular
code string."

Then why don't they finger Tenchi too?

He was not cowering in fear surounded by cyrystals. So they never bothered
to scan him.

If this was her brother's child, then
she had responsibilities to her,

Too twisted, just say niece.

"Aki-chan, time for bed, but down your toys and come with
mommy."

There seems to be a pattern of intentional word-slips here?

No. just an author who got too rushed, and made a dump ass error.

Sasami had sent him here to get
Ayeka's controller.

What was Sasami's response to Ranma?!?

What a nice kitty?

Strange Kangi
covered it's front,

Not really, the style is wrong.

"I'm not a cat little one, there is no need
to fear me.  Have you ever seen a cat like me?"

She speaks!

"I thought Yosho
was a just a warrior. How could his sister still be alive?

Legendary?

"A place called Jusenkyo."

Akanenniichuan!

and did not have the heart to tell her she didn't need
no help in how to be a girl.

Ranma syntax.

Well, that's one excuse. Sometimes it's nice not having to clean up a
characters grammar, you can make believe you wrote it that way on purpose.

	Henry J. Cobb	hcobb@slip.net          http://www.io.com/~hcobb
   She was flawless, just like a china doll.
   Wherever she went, it was pottery in motion.

Hehehe