Subject: Re: [FFML][RandomComments] Secrets Chapter 1
From: "H. Torrance Griffin" <heretic@jhunix.hcf.jhu.edu>
Date: 4/15/1998, 7:18 PM
To: Morpheus the Shaper
CC: Fanfic Mailing List <fanfic@fanfic.com>

	Cute setup, but you should tru to do something about the non-ACCII
quotes.

	Ranma/Akane, Shampoo/Ukyo: No Comments Needed

	It's official, the Kuno's _are_ a dysfunctional family.

	Minor Nit: I see no real reason why Mousse would hide his
connections with Cologne from Nabiki (I can see a rational for doing the
converse although I doubt Cologne would have much against such a _cunning_
wimp).

	Nice touch about Kasumi and Tofu's double life.  Even nice touch
about the two people outwardly most eager about the Ranma/Akane match are
the only people who really oppose it.

	Ryoga: I don't think the entire thing about Akiri is needed.
especially as it seems that you are setting P-chan up to kick over the
central suppourt of the entire mansion of cards <evil grin>

	Feel free to continue with this.

HTG