Richard Lawson wrote:
Kimagure Orange College
Been wondering when this would come out.
We're still wondering when "Life So Dear #2" will be out...
What I don't reply, I agree with.
I'll have to use my power!
I'm not sure which convention you're using. Should that be "my
Power"?
Hmm...this wasn't changed from the original. If I remember, in the
anime, Kyosuke usually refers to it as "pawaa" or something
like that. I assumed it was referring to his power.
Hmm. You know, I wonder if she should be *this* blase about the
teleportation. I mean, she *knows* about his power, and she's seen
the
*effects* of his ESP, but she's never actually seen him teleport.
<Story of eclipse deleted for brevity>
The same thing here with Madoka. She *knows* Kyosuke can teleport,
but
actually seeing it should at least strike her dumb for a second or
cause
her to flinch.
That's a good point. I don't know what the "right" answer really is. I
supposeI was assuming that Ayukawa's normally "cool" demeanor would
eventually adapt to seeing this. She did see the whole "moving in"
scene with his sisters in KOC #1.
The college entrance ceremony
was underway and classes were preparing for the spring semester.
Awkward phrasing. "classes were preparing"? Perhaps "everyone" or
"the
professors" are the ones who are preparing?
I was meaning the profs and administration were prepping classes. In
thiscontext, I meant "classes" to be synonymous with the personnel.
It was a day of great importance; we have been looking forward
to that day for all our lives....
Ugh on the grammar here.
It was a day of great importance, one we had been looking forward to
all
our lives...
Aiieee....this is what it looked like in V1! Vlad! :-)
Kasuga: [Glancing at her and at Takashi, to himself.] I guess
I'm lucky....
Oh yeah? Whyzzat? He doesn't like her parents, or vice versa?
No. Kasuga appreciates that Takashi is there with him and
considershimself lucky. "Opening day" for freshman college students is
a
big deal in Japan. Normally, entire families show up to see their
kid start college. In Ayukawa's case, I fell back on the
old adage that her parents weren't around, which while in character
for them, is rough for her to be there all by herself (from a cultural
aspect).
Takashi: [Notices Kasuga's concern and puts his hand on his
shoulder.]
She'll be OK. If she wants to talk about it, she'll let you know.
Uh huh. This is Madoka we're talking about. She makes a Whitewater
defendant seem positively forthcoming by comparison.
Even Madoka eventually talks to Kyosuke. Sometimes too late yes,
buteventually she will.
Male Student: [Bows.] Please accept my apologies. I'm Hayashibara
Akira.
Akira: Did you hear that my sister is getting married?
?Is this an MST3K? Are you...
<long pause>
Oh, *that* Hayashibara...
Little trival note: Back when KOC was first gearing up, I didn't know
Japanese culture as well as I did now (which ain't that much, but it's
more
than I started with). To create names, I assembled a whole bunch of
male and female given names, and family names into three columns
in Excel, assigned a random number generator and used it to generate
names (like the various professors who populate this and other
episodes).
To generate those names, I plundered some Japanese-styled Role-playing
game books and the Usenet Seiyuu list. When it was time to assign the
name of the "handsome rival", this name came up.
Ayukawa: Sure.... [To herself after Hayashibara leaves.] Handsome
guy....
Hmm. I don't like this characterization of Madoka. Throughout the
manga,
she's shown herself to be invulnerable to these kind of charms. In
fact,
they turn her off in a major way. Witness her reaction to the idol
singer.
This is what I was trying to show...
Throughout the anime (and yes the manga), the whole hordes of other
guys who threw themselves at Madoka were generally either
punks, jerks, womanizers, etc. Quite frankly (IMHO), Kyosuke "won" her
attentions and eventually her affections, both by being a nice guy when
no one else would and because he had no competition whatsoever.
And please note: Madoka does not fall head-over-heels right
there and then. She's just making an observation. However, Hayashibara
(the baseball player, not the seiyuu...:-)) is more than just a handsome
guy (which is what I equate the idol singer to be). As the series
progresses, there's a substantial amount of character development
that shows that he's also a surprisingly down-to-earth person
(especially
when one sees who his father is).
See below for more on this.
Kasamatsu: [Proudly revealing a hand buzzer.] Gotcha!
9_9 Well, that was original. :)
Kasuga: [To himself.] Just because he's rich doesn't
make him special.
No, but it'll buy a real good illusion of uniqueness. ^_^
Oh, he's got more in his corner than just money and looks...(which is
why in some ways he's one of the most "dangerous"
rivals Kyosuke's ever had to face).
Although the building is old, there's a palpable
feeling of tradition.
"Although" implies a contrast here, but I think it's *because* the
building is old that there's a feeling of tradition. "A palpable
feeling
of tradition seems to emanate from the old building."
You're probably right.
I was modelling this after the UTexas/Austin Band hall. That
building is very old and has a lot of "tradition" on the walls.
I am Ono Ryusuke, the director of the symphonic band.
Ryusuke: If you need any chiropractic work, I've got a brother that
can
do wonders.
I almost didn't catch that one as I almost forgot Tofu's family
name...:-)
Again, blame the random-number generator and Excel...
Ayukawa walks towards the woodwinds, sits down and
unpacks her saxophone.
Saxophone, eh? She never plays one in the manga. Is this an anime
thing?
The only thing we see her play in the manga is the keyboards.
Anime thing.
Kasuga: [Laughs.] I would gladly
switch with you, if I could.
Ayukawa: [Quietly.] So would I.
Freaky Friday, the KOR version!
Don't laugh...that's a plot idea that's being kicked around nowand then
on the KOC ML...
The tricky part on that is timing, pacing and how to do it without
turning it into a lemon and grossing readers out...
Ayukawa: I don't know. Your place doesn't have any extra
rooms.... [Playfully.] Maybe I'll just move right into
your room.
Kasuga: Ayukawa!
He objects? Kyosuke no baka.
Kasuga would never survive. The boarding house rooms
don't allow for any privacy at all; he'd die of nose-bleed the
first time she undressed.
Kasuga: [To Kimura.] Th-that's very impressive.... So you're
really good at math?
Kimura: Nope, I just read that off of a bubblegum wrapper.
Kimura probably does chew bubblegum; she's the rightkind of
bubble-headed (until you ask her a math question)
personality...
[Cut to the dance floor. The artificially-generated steam
mixes with the pulsing colored dance floor lights to create
an atmosphere of unreality.
Cool. I wanna go there.
Hey...I was trying to create an allusion. So I didn't doa good job; it
was an early attempt (which didn't
get changed in V2 because we were busy with the bigger
bugs).
Kasuga Narration: On this very important day, I truly began to
realize
the possible consequences of my actions. Among the new friends I
had
met that day, perhaps for the first time, I met someone who might
become a rival. What's more, I wasn't making the things easier by
repeating old mistakes. [Turns over and sighs. He closes his eyes
to
try and get some sleep, but then opens them again with firm
resolve.]
It's not going to happen again! One way or another, I've got to do
something about it!
Heh, nice ending. It sure would be nice to see Kasuga not merely
repeat
the formula of the middle manga stories.
Keep reading...especially #4...
OK, regarding Hayashibara Akira...
What I especially tried to show here on the dance floor was the way
Hayashibara introduced himself. No pretenses, no confrontation,
no challenging for Madoka. He's actually one of the few
straight-forward
nice guys that has met both Kyosuke and Madoka, who also
happens to be a handsome guy. (contrast his attitudes to women with
the handsome tennis coach in KOR and you'll see what I was
trying to show).
This episode was much better than the first one, IMO. The "introduce
the
cast members" bits weren't nearly so clunky.
I like to thing so. Yes, when KOC first starts out, it's a bit slow
becauseI'm trying to introduce a bunch of new chars, but as most people
tell me,
once they're fully introduced, the pacing begins to pick up since we
no longer worry about "introducing and describing" everyone.
Stephen Tsai
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