David Lerman wrote:

Some cursory first impressions -

At 07:45 PM 5/30/98 GMT, David Yellope wrote:

      Akane threw Ranma on his bed and slammed the door behind her.
She then turned to Ranma, "And what the heck was THAT about Ranma?"
She turned her force four glare on Ranma, who was too busy trying to
stay conscious to answer. "This isn't the polite fights you've been
in before Ranma, the Lightning Fists believe that rules as well as
bones are made to be broken! You expect them to fight clean, they're
going to clean up on you. And you'll let your team down."

  Since when have Ranma's fights been polite?  Did any of the major
opponents (Tarou, Saffron, Herb) fight clean?  Tarou does fight dirty
(as he would put it, he fights to win) and Saffron and Herb have
attacks that are so powerful that they don't need to fight dirty even
if it occurred to them.  Do you think that Ryouga learned the 'Bakusai
Tenketsu' to fight a nice fight?  And I don't think that Ukyou's use
of a giant grill and flour bombs would be considered polite.

Not to mention that Ranma has used his fair chare of ditry tricks as
well.  Not that that's stopped him complaining about others using dirty
tricks.

(No, I'm NOT a Ranma-basher, I just sound like it.  ^_^)


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      Mustafa, as he usually did, took the information without
blinking. Brown shivered slightly. For all people knew, The Thai
Kickboxer wasn't born, he was chisled out of ice. For the longest
time, he was only happy when he was breaking somebody's bones. Now he
smiled more, because he now got paid to figure out how best to cause
pain and agony.

  I am not familiar with Street Fighter, but since when was Mustafa a
Thai name?

I'm sure I've seen that name in a fighting game before, but I can't
remember what game or when it was.  And anyway, Street Fighter names are
notoriously silly.

  What I found difficult to believe about the fight was that Akane
takes out two fighters just by normal fighting while Ranma only takes
out one and only by using one of his two most powerful attacks.

And besides, the Hiryu Shouten Ha, as written in the fic, seems to be
completely incorrect.  It's NOT a ki blast but a whirlwind.  A powerful
whirlwind.  About the only similarity it shares with the HRH in the fic
is that it uses the opponent's anger against them.

Oh, and Ranma didn't do the spiral dance set up for the move either, so
it can't be the powerful version.

(I really get sick and tired of the special moves in Ranma getting all
distorted in fanfics.)

Ranma is a much better fighter than Akane.  And he would use the
Amaguriken or (forget name, the confidence based attack) before using
the Hiryu Shoten Ha because it is so powerful.  So I need to ask:
Where are the real Ranma and Akane and what did you with them?

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