Not bad!  A few suggestions:

--The opening soliloquy on "fire" is *far* too long.  You need to get
down to
the heart of the story a lot faster.  Not that what you have written is
bad;
you could use the fire image thoughout the story, continuously, to give
it more coherence as a whole, bringing up elements of it as Ryoko
considers her life.  I.E.

(One paragraph on fire)
(Ryoko looknig at candle.  Thinks a few thoughts from your second
paragraph
on fire.)
(Recalls an incident of killing from her past. Compares it to the
candle's flame.)
etc.

--Is there a specific event that has brought this thoughtfulness on?
Most
of the events Ryoko is recalling are in the past; nothing immediate to
send her into her obvious depression.  Needs a catalyst, particularly
with a character like Ryoko, who is not much given to
self-contemplation.

--Is there a decision she makes at the end?  I assume that she has fled
into the night, but I really didn't see where she had amde the decision
to do so.  Such a thing is not done lightly.

Otherwise, an enjoyable fic.  Keep writing!

Bridget
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