Curry Coffelt wrote:

In your dialogue I recomend doing something like this

    "How are we feeling," he asked pleasantly in English.

This is the proper way to deal with dialogue. Jeanne Hedge pointed this out to me
and I am passing along the advice to you. In other words Repace all question
marks and periods in your dialogue with commas.

WHAT??? NO! No way! <Nightman whips out his degree in Technical Writing
as credentials> NONONONONONONO! 

 ' "How are we feeling?" he asked. '  is a perfectly correct
construction. You should ALWAYS punctuate dialog as it is pronounced,
the only unintuitive trick is that descriptive tags are separated by
commas with the period following. Example:

"He gave me an example to follow," said the commentator.

See also:

"He gave you an example?" the student asked the revered fanfic writer.
"He gave you an example!" the student concluded triumphantly.

Example #2

    "I'm sorry," The man apologised "It's simply that we have some questions

No, this is wrong too. The punctuation that falls within the quotes does
not end the sentence even if it's a question mark or exclamation point,
DEFINITELY not just from a comma.  ' "I'm sorry," he said. ' would be
correct.

I'd also recommend snipping more of the long passages when commenting
like you do; leaving a paragraph before the comments is a good amount
for the author to find his place in, and then you can easily put a few
more blank lines in to separate the commented bits.


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