Ranma 1/2: Grand Tour 1 B

Good prose; not top-heavy or too bare.

Unfortunately, I have no idea what you want to do with this fic. It 
seems to have no point, other than an excuse to write about this new 
universe. Are you writing about Ranma 1/2 or are you just using the 
characters in something entirely different? Fics like this leave me 
cold.




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