Date: 	Tue, 09 Mar 1999 15:38:33 -0700
From: David Johnston <rgorman@telusplanet.net>
To: ffml@fanfic.com
Subject: [FFML] Grab Bag Of Teasers

First a Sailor Moon/Crystal Tokyo fragment.  This is set in the world
of Sailor Moon Expanded, but is not an approved part of their 
continuity.

I honestly didn't bother with this one, not having read Sailor Moon 
Expanded.  You might want to consider going off on your own timeline.


 

And now we turn to a BGC piece which needs a lot of work.
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Ehn...  That ones really tough to do without being dull.
Too talky.  Maybe I should alternate between blowing 
things up and this ersatz Waiting for Godot junk.  

I got through about half of it before I got bored.  Switching back an 
forth is a good idea.  It'll help break things up.  When I noticed 
Sylia's odd situation my first thought was alien abduction.  A bit 
perverse, but that just means you're following one of anime's trends. 
^_~

Next we have the introduction of two characters in a 
sort of crossover fic named "Project:  Crimson Sea".  

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What do you think?  Are they interesting?  How about the 
combat?  And what about Naomi?

I loved it.  If you don't write more I'll have to bombard you with gushy 
fanmail till you do.  Your characters are interesting.  You can tell 
they have history, but you aren't beat over the head with it.  It's one 
of my beliefs that time is a circle.  Nothing ever ends or begins, it 
simply is.  Thus, no matter what the story you always enter it at some 
mid-point.  You did an excellent job of introducing a story without 
giving so much back history that I was bored, and by giving enough so 
that I wasn't lost.  Bravo.  Encore.

And lastly a totally over the top scrap from something
I probably won't do, but if I did do it, I'd call it
Blue Sonnet Tangent
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Didn't bother with that one either.  I'm not in a terribly dark mood 
tonight.

Overall, good work.  You write well and kept me intrigued.  I eagerly 
await your next contribution.


Over & Out
--Christina Walters

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