Well, other than a few glaring spelling errors, I think this was done 
really well.  You definitely have Kyoko's character down...kinda.  
Sorta.  However, I thought Nabiki was beginning to appreciate Kyoko a 
little more--at least, that's the impression I got from Act 3 Part 1.  
Also, I'm gonna complain that Megane didn't show up enough :P

That's about the only comments I have.  Great beta!

Lawrence

P.S. I don't know if I'm representing anyone else on the FFML here, but 
I was wondering when you were going to get SW part 8 out...I'm looking 
forward to it.

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