Victim # 9 !

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This fic's already been C&Ced so why bother ? No really, I agree
with Andrew on most points of his C&C. Though I have to add a 
few things. The dialogue is not up to snuff at times and I expect a
little polish the next chapter. You also have to pace the story a 
bit slower. I find it too fast, but that's just me.