Gary Kleppe wrote:
Just a reminder to everybody out there... PLEASE be careful not to
double-post. Thanks.
Kent Hyam <rodney.hyam@sk.sympatico.ca> wrote:
At lunch, Akane found herself sitting alone with Ryoga and Ranma.
She was beginning to wonder if her friends were avoiding her. There
seemed to be quite a crowd around Sayuri for some reason. Akane's
brooding was interrupted by the back wall of the class exploding inward.
Should probably say the back wall of the room, or of the classroom.
"Kuno, what are you talking about?" Ryoga hurriedly dodged as Ukyo
followed him out the window, and buried the blade of her spatula where
he'd been standing.
"Doubtless this is another fair maiden you have sullied. It ends
now."
How is Ukyo dressed? If she's in her boy disguise, Kuno probably won't
know that she's a maiden at all.
Ukyo has been wearing a girl's uniform for several days. I guess I should
still mention it.
Ryoga was forced on the defensive as Kuno and Ukyo attacked
simultaneously. He managed to sweep Kuno's legs out from under him, but
was forced to leap away from Ukyo's attack.
"Ukyo, I don't want to fight you."
Ukyo didn't waste breathe replying, instead she leveled another
Breath. Breathe's the verb.
mighty slash at Ryoga. Ryoga dodged easily, but was forced to block a
block an
exceptionally viscous swipe by Kuno with his forearm. He was quickly
Why isn't Kuno using his bokken?
Ryoga blocked with his forearm. I'm missing another comma there.
"Bakusai Tenketsu!"
Both Ukyo and Kuno, were understandably surprised, when Ukyo's
weapon suddenly blew up in her hand. Ryoga was not slow to take
Technically, that's only supposed to work on rocks, but if it's
important for the plot then I guess it doesn't matter.
Ryoga uses it on a woodne floor in the manga. Most fanfiction authors assume
it will work on any hard inanimate substance.
ROTFL!
Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics.html
Thanks for all the comments on grammer and spelling as well. They're
depressing but helpful.