David H. Siegel wrote:

C&C of bitsandpieces.

        Johnson didn't answer; in fact, he had moved out of
the light range of everyone else.  Then his head drifted
into the light of Rippongi's flashlight, neatly severed at
the neck.  For a moment, they all stared, then Rippongi and
Anderson both brought their lamps around to see what had
happened.  The last transmission from the expedition was the
sound of screaming.

What did you expect from an expedition in a Mythos-style story?

"Ibuki-san," said Rei evenly, "I want to kill her."

I liked this bit with Rei. In fact, I liked ALL the bits with the
Children. They're all more fully-fleshed here than in the original
series, and less annoying. This is the primary reason why I'd rather
read CoaEG than watch Eva itself.

I agree.  I finally watched some Evangelion, and I definitely like
this fanfic's characters better.   

"Anywhere that people won't notice a few monoliths."

No. No. Not so early. You wouldn't.
But you're going to. The Demon-Sultan himself, hideous piping entourage
and all, is coming to Earth, in all his mad and stupid glory.
The problem that he's the motive force of this entire space-time is
going to be conveniently worked around, I hope. And isn't it traditional
to deal with his messenger, instead?

Problem is, Nyarlothotep isn't the kind of thing you can deal with, 
using a giant robot.  He's much more likely to be a stand-in for Kaworu.
However, I don't think that Azathoth will be coming to town.  Too tough,
and actually Azathoth is pretty harmless in his own right.  Besides, 
he's an Outer God, not a Great Old One.  At worst I figure it will
be Hastur or somebody.