In a message dated 5/25/99 4:05:26 PM Pacific Daylight Time, 
tagan1@ccaccess.net writes:

    This chapter is not based at all in America, and it has almost
 nothing to do with Ranma, but it is an important part of the plot, which
 
 unfortunately, won't finish in this particular sequel.  It is almost
 entirely Sailor Moon based, but be patient, Ranma will return in chapter
 
 6, and 7, and probably 8.  See you there, hopefully.

Well, I will say that at first I was confused while reading chapter 4, enough 
so that I stoped by his website to get the story to date.  For those of you 
who havent done that, I'd recommend it, its worth the time to read it.

That said, let us move right along into the story itself.  Shame there wasnt 
at least ONE Ranma scene in this chapter, as I rather expected SOME 
appearances from the Nerima wrecking crew!  Up to this point, ADV has focused 
primarily on Johnathon, up until the last two chapters.  90% of what has been 
told has been scenes where either Johnathon was present, or directly related.

Ergo, while it seems to have no relavance to the rest of the story in 
general, its probobly there and we won't see the "payoff" of this bit of 
exposition for another couple of chapters as well.  Pat's note to that effect 
also helped me to keep an open mind about this setting up future events.

Moving on to other matters, I think youve done a good job of translating the 
general level of wierdness and comedy that infuses Ranma stories into this 
crossover.  There seem to be some inconsitancies agewise though.  From the 
appearance in the story of the outer senshi, and other comments, it is clear 
that these events take place after R and S, and most probobly after SS and 
Stars.  This would, IMO, place the Senshi as being a year or two older than 
you've portrayed them here.  I would think that the Inners would be about 17 
or 18, with H&M at least one year older, yet I thought I remembered a 
referance that placed them at about 15-16.

I'm also not sure about your portrayal of Ikkuko and Kenji, either, although 
ultimatly it is YOUR portrayal of them.  Given the time clues we have 
otherwise seen, and the probable placement of this story after Episode 200, 
they are usualy portrayed as having accepted Usagi's relationship with 
Mamoru.  This acceptance would tend to indicate to me that the conclusion 
that they jump to here is at odds with previous behavior.  If Usagi is in 
love with Chiba-san, why would she be "fooling around" with 'Diana'???

I take it that as 'Diana' Luna has interacted with Ikkuku in the past (quite 
frequently, and not well, the subtext of the paragraphs in question would 
indicate) the have decided that explaining the curse to her parents is NOT an 
option.  I don;t know if I would agree with this personally, but I can see 
the logic behind such a decision.  It has been well explained in the past 
(Fictive and otherwise) that while the body changes, the brain remains 
basicly as it was.  Ergo, explaining that Diana is also Luna would start 
thoughts runnign in her parents mind as to just what Luna really was.

One last note, that concerns more of the past chapters on you website than 
this one.  You need to go back over and look at the formating very carefully. 
 In the pages I downloaded there were quite a few spelling errors and other 
minor formatting goofs that would seem to indicate that the pages were never 
proofed after you converted the text to HTML.  In fact, in several chapters 
it appears if whole words (ususally ones which would begin thoughts, along 
with the opening <) have mysteriously vanished.  This seems to only be the 
case with the pages that have been coverted to HTML, not to the plain text 
files you show us.   The FIC index also appears slightly out of date, with 
only one chapter of Wazziz name explains it all listed on the index while 
there are 2-3 chapters posted.

I know its very discouraging to be follwing the links from chapter to chapter 
and suggenly hit a 404 error.  This happens at the last Published chapter of 
each of your fics on your page.  It may be a bit more work, but I would 
recommend making shure that the pages that are the last published part of a 
story don't have a "next chapter" link that points nowhere.  This also 
indicates to the reader when he's reached the end of what has been writen to 
date.  I would also suggest re-organizing your main fiction index to add what 
the titles of the various "sub stories" were, so that people who may only be 
looking for one section of them could find them more easily than having to 
thumb through them all looking for what pagest they really want to read.  The 
point when you add the chapters to date of American Vacation would probably 
be a good time to implement those changes if you were going to do so.

Well, Ive talked enough, so ...

JA NE!!