Subject: re: [FFML] [Fanfic][R1/2] Last One Standing, Canto 3
From: LaShawn Wanak
Date: 6/16/1999, 12:21 PM
To: ffml@fanfic.com

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!! CLIFFHANGEEEEEERRRRRRRR!!!

Okay, now that I got that out of the way, I can C&C. This series gets 
weirder and better with each canto. There's something fishy happening with 
Akane (pardon the pun), but now that she's serving the Lady, I betcha 
things are really going to heat up now.

Speaking of the Lady, there's one little nitpick I have. Akane can't be so 
dense to wonder who the heck the Lady is. Byen mentions her name several 
times, but Akane doesn't asks who she is. It's hard to go charging into 
someone's house without learning who the person is first (well, okay, it's 
not so hard...but...you know what I mean.)

The second nitpick I have is how Akane let's Ryouga leave without getting 
medical attention. Of course, I applaud the torture scene--and wince at it 
at the same time. Poor, poor Ryouga. What a fitting, yet horrible 
punishment. And what a horrible way for Akane to find out about his love 
for her and P-chan. However, was Akane so heartless that she lets Ryouga go 
without at least steering him towards a hospital? He couldn't have been in 
that good of shape, was he?

Other than that, this canto was great! Cologne, I bet, will have a fit once 
she learns Akane is now serving the Lady. Akane is getting in way over her 
head, and her stubborn pride in becoming a good martial artist isn't 
helping. Her relationship with Ranma have been severely affected. Ryouga's 
probably going to go ballistic with depression. Tofu's real personality is 
revealing itself more, and Tetsuko appears to be more than she seems. I 
can't take it anymore! Hurry up with Canto 4!
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